Julio Cesar Teixeira
1°D
Today is my first day in Orlando. My father began working here and because of that, me, my mother and my sister had to come as well. Today, we were in Disney, in Universal and Nike Factory Store.
First, there in Disney, I think my feeling was a lot intense. It was one of my biggest dreams to be there. It was very beautiful and there was lot of people there and all of them were speaking different languages, as we were ourselves, too.
Soon after, we got there in Universal. My God, there is some of the places more people that went in many roller coasters. We were very happy and we didn't want it ever to end.
To finish the day, we arrived in Nike Factory store to buy clothes. Our so for okay being oue of the best expensive who have lived learned several questions and modes of education as licenses and these things. Now I will sleep because tomorrow I'll start my first day of class.
Nicolas Heringer 1D
ResponderExcluirIncredible!!
Julio, está ok, mas ainda há muitos defeitos. Faltou a imagem, nem todo o texto está compreensível, pois o inglês está incorreto em algumas partes, a introdução não contém todas a informações que foram pedidas, a sua conclusão não contém como foi seu dia de um modo geral e nem o que pretende fazer nos próximos dias, corrigi problemas com letras maiúsculas e ortografia. 7,0
ResponderExcluirVi que falou que amanhã terá seu primeiro dia de aula. Faltou, também, se despedir do leitor.
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